This week's writing challenge
from
from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes )
is based upon the prompt:
is based upon the prompt:
Thief
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
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"Mom, why is old Miss Taylor so grouchy—all she ever does is sit on her porch and grumble!"
"She's lost too much to thieves to be happy, Sarah, so please be kind to her if you can. When she was your age, a boy stole her heart, but before they could truly be a couple, a man took her innocence. The drugs she used to forget that time destroyed her body, and now the years are stealing her mind."
When Sarah's mother looked across the street later that day, she saw her holding Miss Taylor's hand as she cried.
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Oh my God... its so touching...
ReplyDeleteThank you! It's good to see a new face - especially when they take the time to read and make a comment!
Deletethe ending just got to me, I loved this.
ReplyDeleteJust the sort of reaction I'd hoped for! Thanks!
DeleteTruly lovely.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Freya! And I apologize for taking so long to respond to everyone's comments. It's been a busy year so far. But I appreciate every one of them!
DeleteLove all the different ways of how things can be stolen from you. Great little piece.
ReplyDeleteYes! Old Miss Taylor never caught much of a break during her life - and I hope Sarah can ease the pain a bit.
DeleteThanks for stopping by to visit and leave a comment - and now I should get back to that beta-reading I've promised to do!
Wow, she's suffered plenty; thankfully Sarah is there to help and give something back. Very touching piece. x
ReplyDeleteThanks! I didn't think too much of my story when I first wrote it, but after reading it back to myself, I could see this as a much longer piece and started to see the possibilities. Glad you liked it!
DeleteThis was beautiful - touching and poignant.
ReplyDeleteBehind every face is a story, even the grumpy ones.
Nicely done, K!
Thanks, Tess! I have to say, though, it would have been a whole lot easier to write if I'd had a few more sentences to work with!
DeleteAh, but then it wouldn't be a challenge!
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