Wednesday, April 29, 2015

FSF Challenge - Departure


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This week's writing challenge
from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes )
is based upon the prompt:

Departure


What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

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A real shorty this week...



Left Behind

 
Image source: http://www.heberger-image.fr/images/63436_Pre_Departure.jpeg.html via http://lilliemcferrin.com/five-sentence-fiction-departure/
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     It seemed like such a simple thing: to say goodbye. Kate was going off to a new city and a new job. This was a great opportunity for her. Jason gazed out over the runway and watched her plane lift into the sky, squinting from the sun in his eyes. That didn't hurt as much, though, as the thought that it should have been him.

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12 comments:

  1. TournesolDansUnJardinApril 29, 2015 at 5:49 PM

    Well done...I could spend hours at train stations or airports trying to guess the stories when I people watch. Tracesofthesoul

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    1. K R SmithApril 30, 2015 at 7:36 AM

      I do the same thing. Sometimes I can get an idea for a story, and sometimes I image the faces on a book cover. Thanks for stopping by to read!

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  2. TessApril 29, 2015 at 6:32 PM

    That was unexpected! Not at all where I thought you were going.
    Nicely done, O Master of the bait and switch.

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    1. K R SmithApril 30, 2015 at 7:37 AM

      I have to admit - I do like to twist the ending around a bit!

      And I'm glad to see you're posting work on FSF, too!

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  3. AnonymousMay 1, 2015 at 2:33 AM

    Excellent ending for this story and image. Nice!

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    1. K R SmithMay 1, 2015 at 11:57 AM

      Thanks! For this one, I was able to really fit the image into the story.

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  4. AnonymousMay 1, 2015 at 3:20 AM

    That little twist - exquisite. Loved it.

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    1. K R SmithMay 1, 2015 at 12:06 PM

      I do like to put a twist in when I can. With only five sentences, it's hard sometimes. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  5. Miranda KateMay 1, 2015 at 5:33 PM

    Unexpected ending that gives the piece a whole other dimension and depth. Good ending.

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    1. K R SmithMay 4, 2015 at 7:51 AM

      Thanks! I have to admit, I didn't think Id get so many comments on this story, but I do appreciate them!

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  6. UnknownMay 3, 2015 at 1:09 PM

    Great ending. I enjoyed reading this, K.R.

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    1. K R SmithMay 4, 2015 at 7:57 AM

      Thanks! The ending must have been better than I thought!

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