 |
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:
Waiting
|
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie posts one word for inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.
When I saw this picture, the first thing that came into my mind was Stevie Nick's song "That's Alright." An image like this has so many stories in it. This one is short and sad. And, yes, it's been a while since I've posted a FSF challenge story, but I have been busy!
Waiting
"I'm afraid there'll be a bit of a wait before the train arrives, Miss."
"That's okay," she said while counting out money for her ticket. "It's about the only thing I'm good at."
She had waited for him to break up with his wife, waited for him to notice her, waited for him to propose, and then spent night after night waiting for him to come home until one day he simply didn't. After that, there was no real reason for her to go, but she just couldn't come up with a good reason to stay.
Image source: http://lilliemcferrin.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/08/waiting.jpg
Originally from: http://ludmilascorner.blogspot.com/2012/03/change.html
© 2012-2014 K. R. Smith All rights reserved
Sad story, but often true.
ReplyDelete"After that, there was no real reason for her to go, but she just couldn't come up with a good reason to stay. "
Fantastic last line - empowering.
Great and tightly written piece.
Thanks! There is a sort of desperate resignation expressed in that line that sums up the characters feelings about her situation. also, I don't know who did the original artwork, but I really like it.
DeleteI agree with Pat - that last line is nice stated. I also really like how she believes she's only good at waiting.
ReplyDeleteYes - the girl/woman has really done nothing wrong, yet she feels like a failure. Now she is venturing off to somewhere, and I don't know if she has a destination or is just trying to escape. I'd have to do a longer story to figure that one out!
Delete