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This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:
Freedom
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What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie posts one word for inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.
Great Escape
"He's gotten out again, hasn't he, Rosella?"
"Yes, Lavinia, he has, and you can tell he loves to run and play on these nice days. And I enjoy watching him."
"Why don't you put up a fence to keep him in your yard?"
The old woman replied in a thick accent as she rubbed the tattoo on her arm, "I'm not really fond of fences."
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Wow - that packed a powerful punch at the end! Very well done.
ReplyDeleteGod Bless you,
Cheryl
Thanks! I wanted it to be subtle, but I also wanted the events of Rosella's life to be understood - especially pertaining to her dislike of fences.
DeleteOne has to wonder what he does in Lavinia's yard that makes her so angry at Rosella for allowing her dog to run free as much as she does. And you can tell from her remark to Lavinia there's some sort of hatred between the two which is more than just the matter of the dog. I've got wonder whether I've read between the five lines of your response this week correctly. Have a GREAT WEEKEND with your family.
ReplyDeleteAs a reader, you can add anything your imagination finds between the lines - it's neither right nor wrong. The situation you've developed is plausible, and with only 5 sentences, a lot can be left out! It may not have been my focus, but I can see how that could be interpreted that way. I'm just glad you've stopped by to read!
DeleteVery nice, a good punch in the last line.
ReplyDeleteThanks! That last line really does tell most of the story.
DeleteLove the last line and the inferences for the reader as to why she doesn't like fences. Very effective take ion very few words. x
ReplyDeleteThanks! I've been trying to make my challenge postings more concise and succinct based on what I've seen others do.
DeleteNow this is poignant...and why I love your writing so much! One word, well two if you include 'fences', and we're right there with heartbreak... I got shivers reading that last line!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I don't know what else to say!
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