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This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:
Moments
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What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie posts one word for inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.
Shameless
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The horror anthology,
by Burial Day Books,
includes my poem, The Ballad of Drunken Jack.
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This is sort of a prose poem, and I dislike prose poems. They're not really poems, in my opinion. So this is just a weirdly formatted story. So don't tell anyone about this...
Never Enough
Then he hesitated a moment before his first kiss.
A few years later, he took a moment to stare into her eyes when she said she would marry him.
And he said he wanted a moment as he stood by her bed when they told him she hadn't survived the birth of their child.
But there weren't any left.
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Such a play of emotion, anxiety and fear, hope and joy, loss and pain. Very well written!
ReplyDeleteThanks! There is quite a range of feelings in that little story!
Deletehow beautifully you've weaved a story of lifetime around the term moment... Superb!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I don't think I've ever used the prompt word so much in a post - I was worried it might be overdone.
DeleteExcellent. You said so much, in so few words. I really like this one. Powerful emotion.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I have been trying to shorten my FSF posts after seeing how well others can write a story in so few words.
DeleteOh how heartbreaking. Beautiful piece.
ReplyDeleteThanks! It's a little different than what I normally write, and it's good to know that it works!
DeleteThis is a beauty ... touched me real deep.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind comment - and for your time in reading and commenting! It really does mean something when readers let me know what they think!
DeleteThis is so heart wrenchingly beautiful. The two sides of life, the very best, and the very worst. You wrote a stunner for this prompt!
ReplyDeleteThanks! That's the first time I ever got a story described as a stunner!
DeleteThe moments you create are so precious and heart breaking. That last line has left a lump in my throat such is the emotion. A very powerful journey. x
ReplyDeleteThanks! That last line does stop and make you think.
DeleteThat was beautiful! Really well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteAs a side note, if I don't get around to everyone's posts this week, it's because my Internet connection is rather dicey right now. Not sure where the problem is...
Ack! This was so sad. Even though I could feel it coming, it still took me by surprise. I need a warning before reading something like that!
ReplyDeleteNicely written though, K. You wielded your words powerfully and well.
Sorry about that! But thanks for reading it through anyway!
DeleteI'll try a warning next time so that you'll be prepared!